• Lumidaub@feddit.org
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    3 days ago

    Almost perfect, and I’m going to be rude and offer unsolicited, hopefully constructive, criticism: when the second boob appears it’s not immediately clear which one is which because the first one keeps switching between left and right between panels. Otherwise excellent.

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      3 days ago

      The boob in the 4th and right side of the 5th panels are identical, as are the 2nd and right side of the 6th.

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        Yeah, I did figure it out after taking another look. It’s not ideal though for your comic to make readers have to figure out who’s who and where in a panel (unless there’s some effect you want to achieve, like disorientation - rules are meant to be broken after all). Compare the 180 degrees rule in movie making (which is also true in comics).