• itslilith@lemmy.blahaj.zone
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    4 days ago

    Lemmy users when someone’s creative writing uses slightly incorrect or unconventional grammar for stylistic effect:

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      These replies are mega cope. It’s not slightly incorrect, just incorrect or very lazy. It’s mentally exhausting to try and read this way, and they do not capitalize beginning of their ‘sentences’, nor ‘I’, etc.

      Writing in this way does not make one come off as the next e. e. cummings, they just look very uneducated.

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        [I] went into a wine shop the other day to buy pasta and they did not have pasta[,] but they were doing a wine tasting[,] so i thought what the hell. [A]nd [I] got to chatting with the other woman there[,] because we had both just come from the library and were comparing our books and sipping wine and[,] turns out[,] we’re both teachers[,] so we got on the topic of phones in classrooms—and the guy pouring our wine was like[:] ‘that’s actually a point of contention in one of my divorces right now’.
        [A]nd i very delicately said ‘one of your divorces?’ and his eyes got really big and he said [‘]IM A PARALEGAL[’]

        It only takes only a few punctuation marks to make it grammatically correct. Noticably not a single full stop is missing, so it’s not even a run-on sentence in the classical sense. This is closer to a stylistic device called ‘stream of consciousness’.

        Or are you bothered that the sentence is long? In that case I got bad news about classical literature for you, you better stay clear of the likes of Thomas Mann